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looking for a part time job in a football club. write a letter to the manager

looking for a part time job in a football club. write a letter to the manager 2PmBM
Dear Sir, I am writing to show my interest to serve as a part-time nurse in your Football Club. I am Akande Hajarat, 26 years of age, living in Osun State, Nigeria. I graduated from Obafemi Awolowo University School of Nursing as a registered nurse in 2019. Currently, I am an undergraduate Nursing student of University of Ibadan undergoing a part-time training to obtain a Bachelor in Nursing degree. I worked in Alhayyu Hospital for 2 years where I served as a mental health nurse incharge for giving quality of care to my patients and also providing them with medications. Also, I have a good communication skills, built an effective relationship with my patients in need of mental health services. Would you kindly consider my request as I believe I am a qualified candidate for this post. I wish to resume as soon as possible. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Thanks for your consideration. Yours faithfully, Hajarat.
Dear Sir,

I am writing to
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show
my interest to serve as a part-time nurse in your Football Club. I am
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Akande
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Hajarat
, 26 years of age, living in
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Osun
State, Nigeria.
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I
graduated from
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Obafemi
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Awolowo
University School of Nursing as a registered nurse in 2019.
Currently
, I am an undergraduate Nursing student of University of Ibadan undergoing a part-time training to obtain a Bachelor in Nursing degree.

I worked in
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Alhayyu
Hospital for 2
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years where
I served as a mental health nurse
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incharge
for giving quality of care to my patients and
also
providing them with medications.
Also
, I have a
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good
communication
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skills
, built an effective relationship with my patients in need of mental health services.

Would you kindly consider my request as I believe I am a qualified candidate for this post. I wish to resume as
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soon
as possible. I look forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

Thanks for your consideration.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Hajarat
.

IELTS letter looking for a part time job in a football club. write a letter to the manager

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
160 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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