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Life has become much more stressful compared to our parYou work for a company. You have seen some information online about a training course that would be useful for your work. WAL to your manager. Give the detail of the course, say how the course would be useful, explain how company could help you to do this course.ent’s generation. As a result, stress-related illnesses are increasing around the world. Why is stress such widespread in the modern world and what do you think can be done to overcome the problems caused by stress?

Life has become much more stressful compared to our parYou work for a company. You have seen some information online about a training course that would be useful for your work. WAL to your manager. Give the detail of the course, say how the course would be useful, explain how company could help you to do this course. ent’s generation. As a result, stress-related illnesses are increasing around the world. Why is stress such widespread in the modern world and what do you think can be done to overcome the problems caused by stress? GPQo
Respected sir, I am khushboo trivedi one of your trustworthy employee. Recently, I gone through one of the renowned organization’s website and found one workshop which is related with an emerging technology on which I am working. It would be an honor if you could permit and assist me for it. Let me brief about the course so that you will have an idea about it. It emphasis on recent trends and technologies such as graphics and animation. Apart from this, it has hand on training on how to include it in android operating system. I am into this profession since last 3 years, it would be an inevitable to upgrade with modernize world. This workshop is held for one week duration. It would be a great opportunity for me to renovate my knowledge. Moreover, it would be significant assist if you grant my leave for such a long duration with the renumeration. I am hoping for affirmative reply from you. Thank you. Yours Sincerely, Khushboo Trivedi
Respected sir,

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one of your trustworthy employee. Recently, I
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gone
through one of the renowned organization’s website and found one workshop which
is related
with an emerging technology on which I am working. It would be an honor if you could permit and assist me for it.

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that you will have an
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about it. It
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emphasis
on recent trends and technologies such as graphics and animation. Apart from this, it has hand on training on how to include it in android operating system.

I am into this profession since last 3 years, it would be an inevitable to upgrade with modernize world. This workshop
is held
for one week duration.

It would be a great opportunity for me to renovate my knowledge.
Moreover
, it would be significant assist if you grant my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
for such a long duration with the
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renumeration
.

I am hoping for affirmative reply from you.

Thank you.

Yours
Sincerely
,

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Khushboo
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Trivedi

IELTS letter Life has become much more stressful compared to our parYou work for a company. You have seen some information online about a training course that would be useful for your work. WAL to your manager. Give the detail of the course, say how the course would be useful, explain how company could help you to do this course. ent’s generation. As a result, stress-related illnesses are increasing around the world. Why is stress such widespread in the modern world and what do you think can be done to overcome the problems caused by stress?

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