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You recently celebrated a special occasion in your personal life and received a card and a present from your colleagues at work. Write a letter to your colleagues. In your letter remind your colleagues what the special occasion you were celebrating was thank them for the card and gift explain why you like the gift and how you will use it

You recently celebrated a special occasion in your personal life and received a card and a present from your colleagues at work. Write a letter to your colleagues. In your letter remind your colleagues what the special occasion you were celebrating was thank them for the card and gift explain why you like the gift and how you will use it Qj7x
Dear Alex, I hope you are doing well. I would like to express my warm feelings about my birthday present, which you presented to me yesterday. Recently, I’ve set up my small birthday occasion to celebrate with all my counterparts. The ambience of this party was amazing due to an awful lot of entertainment, exquisite delicacies and beverages. I would like to say thank you to you for your temptation and time for me. I know that for you choosing this gift wasn’t a walk in the park. This present is so efficient for me and can sort out many problems. The present was so beneficial for me that was consisted of a card for the gym and a fitness tracker, which are so grave to my health. This ticket provides me an opportunity to lose my weight and finally gain traction. Besides, the tracker eases the process of investigating my blood pressure. Best wishes, Kate
Dear Alex,

I hope you are doing well. I would like to express my warm feelings about my birthday present, which you presented to me yesterday. Recently, I’ve set up my
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birthday occasion to celebrate with all my counterparts. The ambience of this party was amazing due to an awful lot of entertainment, exquisite delicacies and beverages.

I would like to say thank you to you for your temptation and time for me. I know that for you choosing this gift wasn’t a walk in the park. This present is
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so
efficient for me and can sort out
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many
problems.

The present was
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so
beneficial for me that
was consisted
of a card for the gym and a fitness tracker, which are
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so
grave to my health. This ticket provides me an opportunity to lose my weight and
finally
gain traction.
Besides
, the tracker
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eases
the process of investigating my blood pressure.

Best wishes,

Kate

IELTS letter You recently celebrated a special occasion in your personal life and received a card and a present from your colleagues at work. Write a letter to your colleagues. In your letter remind your colleagues what the special occasion you were celebrating was thank them for the card and gift explain why you like the gift and how you will use it

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