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Letter to Transport Company for the delayed service in your area

Letter to Transport Company for the delayed service in your area PEW1g

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to draw your attention to the issues related to local bus service in Manchester. I take 7. 30 am bus from Manchester to Liverpool to reach my office. This week the bus arrived 10 minutes late each day and I was not able to find a seat for myself due to overcrowding. It is not only with me, but other passengers are also facing similar problems with overcrowding and delays in reaching to their respective destinations due to late service. This is leading to the increase in frustration and inconvenience as people have to stand during their entire journey which is really tiresome. I would like to suggest that in order to address these concerns, please increase the number of buses on this route during the peak hours. In addition to this, ensure that the buses are arriving on time. I hope you will address these concerns and look into this matter on priority. Yours faithfully Sam Williams

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to draw your attention to the issues related to local bus service in Manchester.

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please
 increase the number of buses on this route during the peak hours. In addition
 to this, ensure that the buses are arriving on time.

I hope you will address these concerns and look into this matter on priority.

Yours faithfully


Sam Williams

IELTS letter Letter to Transport Company for the delayed service in your area

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

166 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 6.5

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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