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An English teenager from Raffles Institution, Singapore is going to stay with your family for two months on a cultural homestay program. Complete a letter to inform him/her of the rules in your family. Write a letter of between 160 and 180 words. You may use the ideas in Activity 2.

An English teenager from Raffles Institution, Singapore is going to stay with your family for two months on a cultural homestay program. Complete a letter to inform him/her of the rules in your family. Write a letter of between 160 and 180 words. You may use the ideas in Activity 2. 3LYEn
Tran Ngoc Mai, Cau Giay, Ha Noi, Viet Nam September, 9th, 2021 Dear Jame, I was very happy to hear that you will be staying with my family for 2 months. We live in a three-bedroom penthouse which is pretty large and warm. You will have your own bedroom during your stay here. My family is extremely comfortable and hospitable. However, we have a few family rules that you must follow. One important rule in my family is that we must respect elderly members and all of others members in family. It’s the obivious work that everyone should do so I think you are also comfortable with this, right? No need to worry, everyone in my family will respect and esteem you as a family member. The second one is that you have to keep your bedroom clean. Having a comfortable space make us study and work effectively, you know. Besides, being tidy is a good habit to have a healthy life because it helps us to prevent many diseases. Last but not least, we do not allowed to talk, watch TV or listen to music at a loud volume too late (after 10p. m). Because it will affect everyone, especially my dad, he has a troubled sleeping and he would be upset if disturbed in the mid-night. If you have any questions, please let me know. We will try our best to make you feel comfortable during your stay with us. I hope you will enjoy your time in Viet Nam. Looking forward to meeting you. Best wishes, Mai
Tran
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Ngoc
Mai,
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Cau
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Giay
, Ha
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Noi
,
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Viet
Nam

September, 9th, 2021

Dear Jame,

I was
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very
happy to hear that you will be staying with my
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family
for 2 months. We
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live
in a three-bedroom penthouse which is pretty large and warm. You will have your
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own
bedroom during your stay here.

My
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family
is
extremely
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comfortable
and hospitable.
However
, we have a few
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family
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rules
that you
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must
follow.

One
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important
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rule
in my
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family
is that we
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must
respect elderly members and
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all of others
members in
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family
. It’s the
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obivious
work that everyone should do
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so
I
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think
you are
also
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comfortable
with this, right? No need to worry, everyone in my
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family
will respect and esteem you as a
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family
member.

The second one is that you
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have to
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keep
your bedroom clean. Having a
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comfortable
space
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make
us study and work
effectively
, you know.
Besides
, being tidy is a
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good
habit to have a healthy life
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because
it
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helps
us to
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prevent
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many
diseases.

Last
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but
not least, we do not
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allowed
Did you mean "talking"? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
to talk
,
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watch
TV or listen to music at a loud volume too late (after 10p. m).
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Because
it will affect everyone,
especially
my dad, he has a troubled
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sleeping and
he would
be upset
if disturbed in the mid-night.

If you have any questions,
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please
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let
me know. We will try our best to
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make
you feel
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comfortable
during your stay with us.

I hope you will enjoy your time in
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Viet
Nam.

Looking forward to meeting you.

Best wishes,

Mai
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IELTS letter An English teenager from Raffles Institution, Singapore is going to stay with your family for two months on a cultural homestay program. Complete a letter to inform him/her of the rules in your family. Write a letter of between 160 and 180 words. You may use the ideas in Activity 2.

Letter
  American English
11 paragraphs
259 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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