Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Letter to the hospital, response

Letter to the hospital, response XEAAE
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in response to your advertisement. Now that number of COVID-19 patients is increased I am willing to volunteer at the hospital. During the pandemic I took care of my family members, so I feel like I am capable and experienced to help. I am an engineer by profession, since I do not have a medical degree, I express my interest to help you in patient admission procedures. I have 14 years experience with databases, thus this could be helpful to improve data entry and decrease admission time. Also, I can be useful in compilation of daily, weekly and monthly reports. Currently, I am engaged in the company where I work from Monday to Friday in the regular interval 08: 00 to 16: 00. Considering the distance to the hospital, I think from 17: 00 I can be ready to start, until 21: 00 every working day. I look forward to your reply. Yours sincerely, Afrim Syla
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in response to your advertisement.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
that number of COVID-19 patients
is increased
I am willing to volunteer at the hospital. During the pandemic I took care of my family members,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I feel like I am capable and experienced to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
.

I am an engineer by profession, since I do not have a medical degree, I express my interest to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
you in patient admission procedures. I have 14 years experience with databases,
thus
this could be helpful to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
data entry and decrease admission time.
Also
, I can be useful in compilation of daily, weekly and monthly reports.

Currently
, I
am engaged
in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
where I work from Monday to Friday in the regular interval 08: 00 to 16: 00. Considering the distance to the hospital, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
from 17: 00 I can be ready to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
, until 21: 00 every working day.

I look forward to your reply.

Yours
sincerely
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Afrim
Possible spelling mistake found.
Syla

IELTS letter Letter to the hospital, response

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
162 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Letter to the hospital, response