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Letter to enrollment officer,

Letter to enrollment officer, KlDrN

Dear enrollment officer, I just came across this good news that a computer course about 'advanced excel' will be launched soon. This news is really excited me because i have been using MS-Excel for years to complete my assignments; but based on simple usages, only. I need this course to hone my skills for deeper data analysis and data visualization by using excel charts and graphs. I tried a lot but because of busy study schedule i was not able to invest extra time to learn advanced Excel options such as Pivot tables and plots, etc. Therefore, I request you, please allow me to enroll in this course that will be an added advantage for me to do my assignments by keep incorporating next-level data analysis and graphs. I believe that, this MS-Excel course will enable me to go extra mile in data presentation and completing my course works with flying colors. I look forward to hearing from you. Regards, ABC

Dear enrollment officer,

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I look forward to hearing from you.

Regards,

ABC