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Letter for college magazine for some improvements in cafeteria

Letter for college magazine for some improvements in cafeteria AwGYe

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to draw your attention towards the cafeteria setup in our prestigious college which I believe require few improvements. I would like to first start with the highlighting that it is a great place for students to spend their free time and have a chit-chat with fellow classmates and friends. The cafeteria has some great food options which are delicious and pocket-friendly. However, I would request you to have a look at the furniture available which seems to be very old and some of the chairs are broken which need repair. Also, due to limited staff, usually their is a delay in delivering orders. I have few suggestions on how to improve the services, if you are happy to consider. Firstly, all the table and chairs available should be repaired and replaced where possible. Secondly, some students might be interested in doing part-time work at the cafe to earn pocket money. Lastly, some motivational posters can be pasted on the walls to make it nice and more friendly place. I hope that you would consider the above suggestions. Yours faithfully, Sam

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to draw your attention towards the cafeteria setup in our prestigious college which I believe require few improvements.

I would like to first
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 it nice and more friendly place.

I hope that you would consider the above suggestions.

Yours faithfully
,

Sam