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Last year you attended a presentation skill course at the Sydney College of Australia. Your new employer has asked you to provide copies of your reports and assignments as quickly as possible. Write a letter to the director of the school. In your letter, explain: • who you are and why you are writing • request these documents • ask whether you need to pay any fee for that

Dear Sir / Madam, I hope this letter finds you in good health. I am Atika Usman, currently serving at XYZ company, posted as assistant manager. I am writng this letter to request you for documents pertinent to presentation, which was conducted at your college last year on skill courses. Recently, I have been instructed by my employer to prepare reports and assignments about the mentioned topic. Moreover, it will be indeed helpful to train our new employees in order to excel their further creativity. Unfortunately, I have missed some old records and so I will be requiring your further support in order to obtain the required documents. I would appreciate if you could do the needful. Further also, I would like to know if there is any amount of payment I need to do for mentioned purpose. I will make it as early as possible. I will be looking forward to hear from you. Yours sincerely.
Dear Sir / Madam,

I hope this letter finds you in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
health. I am
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Atika
Usman,
currently
serving at XYZ
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
, posted as assistant manager.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am
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writng
this letter to request you for documents pertinent to presentation, which
was conducted
at your college last year on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
courses.

Recently, I have
been instructed
by my employer to prepare reports and assignments about the mentioned topic.
Moreover
, it will be
indeed
helpful to train our new employees in order to excel their
further
creativity. Unfortunately, I have missed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
records and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I will be requiring your
further
support in order to obtain the required documents.

I would appreciate if you could
This expression is chiefly Indian English or dated British English. Consider an alternative that is more suited for an international audience.
do the needful
.
Further
also
, I would like to know if there is any amount of payment I need to do for mentioned purpose. I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it as early as possible.

I will be looking forward
In the grammatical structure ‘look + forward + to + verb’, the verb ‘to’ is used with the gerund: “to hearing”.
to hear
from you.

Yours
sincerely
.

IELTS letter Last year you attended a presentation skill course at the Sydney College of Australia. Your new employer has asked you to provide copies of your reports and assignments as quickly as possible. Write a letter to the director of the school. In your letter, explain: • who you are and why you are writing • request these documents • ask whether you need to pay any fee for that

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6.0
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