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Last year you attended a presentation skill course at the Sydney College of Australia. Your new employer has asked you to provide copies of your reports and assignments as quickly as possible. v.4

Last year you attended a presentation skill course at the Sydney College of Australia. Your new employer has asked you to provide copies of your reports and assignments as quickly as possible. v. 4
I am Julia Scarlet from the United Kingdom. I am writing to you to requests copies of my reports and assignment that I submitted to the course coordinator to complete a presentation skill course I undertook at the Sydney College of Australia. I am hoping you would arrange to send me those copies as I need them urgently. I completed the course on 18th March 2019 under the supervision of Mr Alfred and had my copy of reports, certificate and assignment. I submitted those to my previous employer 'LVL Group' and recently took a job with another company. The new company has asked me to forward these papers and this is why I need these documents urgently. I had email correspondence with Mr Alfred, my course coordinator, and he suggested me to contact you for those papers. I would request you to forward these documents to my address as soon as possible. Kindly inform me if there is any charge for the second copy of these documents. If there is any, I would be ready to pay for that. I would really appreciate your cooperation and kind response. Yours faithfully, Julia Scarlet
I am Julia Scarlet from the United Kingdom. I am writing to you to requests
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
copies
of my reports and assignment that I submitted to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
coordinator to complete a presentation
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
I undertook at the Sydney College of Australia.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am hoping you would arrange to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
copies
as I need them
urgently
.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
completed the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
on 18th March 2019 under the supervision of Mr Alfred and had my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
copy
of reports, certificate and assignment.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
submitted those to my previous employer 'LVL Group' and recently took a job with another
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. The new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
has asked me to forward these papers and this is why I need these documents
urgently
.

I had email correspondence with Mr Alfred, my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
coordinator, and he suggested me to contact you for those papers. I would request you to forward these documents to my address as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible. Kindly inform me if there is any charge for the second
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
copy
of these documents. If there is any, I would be ready to pay for that.

I would
really
appreciate your cooperation and kind response.

Yours
faithfully
,

Julia Scarlet
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter Last year you attended a presentation skill course at the Sydney College of Australia. Your new employer has asked you to provide copies of your reports and assignments as quickly as possible. v. 4

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
191 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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