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Last year you attended a presentation skill course at the Sydney College of Australia. Your new employer has asked you to provide copies of your reports and assignments as quickly as possible. v.5

Last year you attended a presentation skill course at the Sydney College of Australia. Your new employer has asked you to provide copies of your reports and assignments as quickly as possible. v. 5
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to ask you for a very important favour. But, before I get into giving the details about the type of favour, I am asking, please allow me first to introduce myself. My name is Noah Kyle, and I attended a short presentation skill course during the last summer at your renowned Sydney College of Australia. By the way, my student ID was S-231 556, and I have completed the course very successfully from batch '37'. Now, I have been offered a new job at a telecommunication company, but before I get the formal offer letter in my hand, my new employer has asked me to produce the copies of my reports and assignments from the course I attended at your college. I need them within the next two weeks. Now, I understand that I may be asking for this favour on rather short notice, but I would really be grateful to you if you help me get all the necessary papers and documents from my short course at your earliest convenience.   Please also let me know if there is any fee for this service. If there is any payment involved, please do let me know promptly so that I can arrange to pay it quickly. Thank you in advance for your help. Yours faithfully, Noah Kyle
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to ask you for a
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very
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important
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favour
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,
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before
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get
into giving the
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details
about the type of
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favour
, I am asking,
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please
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allow
me
first
to introduce myself. My name is Noah Kyle, and I attended a short presentation
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skill
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course
during the last summer at your renowned Sydney College of Australia. By the way, my student ID was S-231 556, and I have completed the
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course
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very
successfully
from batch '37'.

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Now
, I have
been offered
a new job at a telecommunication
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company
,
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but
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before
I
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get
the formal offer letter in my hand, my new employer has asked me to produce the copies of my reports and assignments from the
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course
I attended at your college. I need them within the
next
two weeks.

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Now
, I understand that I may be asking for this
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favour
on
rather
short notice,
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but
I would
really
be grateful to you if you
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help
me
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get
all the necessary papers and documents from my short
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course
at your earliest convenience.
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Please
also
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let
me know if there is any fee for this service. If there is any payment involved,
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please
do
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let
me know
promptly
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so
that I can arrange to pay it
quickly
.

Thank you in advance for your
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help
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Noah Kyle
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter Last year you attended a presentation skill course at the Sydney College of Australia. Your new employer has asked you to provide copies of your reports and assignments as quickly as possible. v. 5

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
225 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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