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Laptop Auto Shutdown Issue

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Dear Sir / Madam I would like put into your notice that I have bought a Laptop from your company on 31-March-20. The laptop has been working fine until last two weeks wherein it was getting shoutdown automatically. I tried to re-start the computer several timesand also monitored the charging level of the laptop battery several time but the results were unchanged. The laptop is still under warranty and the details of the same is mentioned below. Laptop Model No. XYZ123455 Invoice No. 12345 Dated 31-March-20 Customer Name Sudipto Bhattacharya Address 10, Jonson Road, Montrail, Canada I understand that an onsite warrenty will be provided during the warranty period. I hope your engineer will visit my residence at the earliest to resolve the said problem. I will be really pleased to have your resposne in the soonest possible timelines. Regards, Sudipto Bhattacharya
Dear Sir / Madam

I would like put into your notice that I have
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on 31-March-20. The
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has been working fine until last two weeks
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it
was getting
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I tried to re-
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start
the computer several
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monitored the charging level of the
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battery
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but
the results
were unchanged
.

The
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laptop
is
still
under warranty and the
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details
of the same
is mentioned
below.

Laptop Model No. XYZ123455

Invoice No. 12345

Dated 31-March-20

Customer Name
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Sudipto
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Bhattacharya


Address 10, Jonson Road,
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Montrail
,
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Canada


I understand that an onsite
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warrenty
will
be provided
during the warranty period. I hope your engineer will visit my residence at the earliest to resolve the said

problem.

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will be
really
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resposne
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Regards,

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Sudipto
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Bhattacharya

IELTS letter Laptop Auto Shutdown Issue

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10 paragraphs
141 words
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