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In your letter, you should tell: • introduce yourself and your colleagues • give information about the business meeting • tell other requests you might have.

In your letter, you should tell: • introduce yourself and your colleagues • give information about the business meeting • tell other requests you might have. 9pEW
My name is Shwatank Bhasin, and I work as an Infrastructure consultant for HCL Technologies. Well, I am writing this letter to inform you that I will be coming to your hotel for two-day business trip with my colleagues. The dates for the meeting are 18th March – 20th March, 2021. We have invited our regular clients for a conference meeting to talk about new technologies. Therefore, I request you to please arrange a conference hall and a few breakouts meetings rooms for small discussion in coffee and tea breaks. Moreover, we want your hotel to prepare lunch for our guests during the lunch time as the meeting will start at 11AM and will finish in evening around 6PM. Furthermore, I would request you to please provide us a projector, mike and speakers for presentation. I would be grateful if you will provide the required materials for meeting. I am looking forward to hearing from your soon.
My name is
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Shwatank
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Bhasin
, and I work as an Infrastructure consultant for HCL Technologies. Well, I am writing this letter to inform you that I will be coming to your hotel for two-day business trip with my colleagues.

The dates for the
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meeting
are 18th March
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–
20th
When specifying a month and year, the comma is unnecessary: "March 2021".
March, 2021
. We have invited our regular clients for a conference
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meeting
to talk about new technologies.
Therefore
, I request you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
arrange a conference hall and a few breakouts
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meetings
rooms for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
discussion in coffee and tea breaks.
Moreover
, we want your hotel to prepare lunch for our guests during the
This word is normally spelled as one.
lunch time
as the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meeting
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
at 11AM and will finish in evening around 6PM.

Furthermore
, I would request you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
provide us a projector, mike and speakers for presentation. I would be grateful if you will provide the required materials for meeting.

I am looking forward to hearing from
Did you mean "you're"?
your
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

IELTS letter In your letter, you should tell: • introduce yourself and your colleagues • give information about the business meeting • tell other requests you might have.

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
157 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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