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I’m writing this letter to you to say that my address was changed, and now I have been living in my new house for three days ago.

I’m writing this letter to you to say that my address was changed, and now I have been living in my new house for three days ago. bn5Y
I’m writing this letter to you to say that my address was changed, and now I have been living in my new house for three days ago. As you know my old house was somewhat ruined and that was situated in a poor and crowded area. I’ve borrowed a loan from the bank, and I had saved some money. Therefore, I could buy a new apartment with all those money. My new apartment is located in the city center. My house is big enough and likewise has two bedrooms that each one has a shared balcony. Which has a spectacular panoramic view of the city. It’s a modern house so many of my household appliances are equipped with the Internet that we can control those with a smartphone. Actually, for celebrating my annual wedding, I’ll take a party in my new house. Many of my colleagues and our old friends take part in this party, so I wish to see you next week on Saturday evening. I hope to see you at my birthday party! Best regards, Amin
I’m writing this letter to you to say that my address was
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changed
, and
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now
I have been living in my
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new
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house
for three days ago.

As you know my
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old
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house
was somewhat ruined and that
was situated
in a poor and crowded area. I’ve borrowed a loan from the bank, and I had saved
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some
money.
Therefore
, I could
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buy
a
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new
apartment with all
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those money
.

My
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new
apartment
is located
in the city center. My
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house
is
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big
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enough
and
likewise
has two bedrooms that each one has a shared balcony.
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Which
has a spectacular panoramic view of the city. It’s a modern
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house
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so
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many
of my household appliances
are equipped
with the Internet that we can control those with a smartphone.

Actually, for celebrating my annual wedding, I’ll take a party in my
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new
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house
.
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Many
of my colleagues and our
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old
friends
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take part
in this party,
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so
I wish to
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see
you
next
week on Saturday evening.

I hope to
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see
you at my birthday party!

Best regards,

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Amin

IELTS letter I’m writing this letter to you to say that my address was changed, and now I have been living in my new house for three days ago.

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
177 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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