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After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department.Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department.

After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department. Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department. ydwg
Dear Sir/Mam, I am writing this letter to request for a department change. Since, I have been associated with HR department from past three years eventhough I am an MBA graduate in finance from top business school. Undoubtedly, I would like to join the finance department where I can utilize my knowledge and do justification to my qualification. I would like to implement ideas to increase the profit of the company and bring our organization to next level. In addition to my degree, I have done an internship just after my college in an investment bank. Moreover, I am regular follower of financial news and stock market updtaes. Evidently, I am having academic eligibility as well as relevant work experience to work in finance section. Hope you will grant permission for this internal transfer. Yours Sincerely, Ginu Thomas
Dear Sir/Mam,

I am writing this letter to request for a department
change
.
Since
, I have
been associated
with HR department from past three years
eventhough
I am an MBA graduate in finance from top business school.

Undoubtedly
, I would like to
join
the finance department where I can utilize my knowledge and do justification to my qualification. I would like to implement
ideas
to increase the profit of the
company
and bring our organization to
next
level.

In addition
to my degree, I have done an internship
just
after my college in an investment bank.
Moreover
, I
am regular
follower of financial news and stock market
updtaes
.
Evidently
, I am having academic eligibility
as well
as relevant work experience to work in finance section.

Hope you will grant permission for this internal transfer.

Yours
Sincerely
,

Ginu
Thomas
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IELTS letter After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department. Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
137 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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