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I am writing to you to recommend a friend of mine “ Peter “ to the the vacancy of “ sports teacher “ in our school. Allow me to elaborate.

I am writing to you to recommend a friend of mine “ Peter “ to the the vacancy of “ sports teacher “ in our school. Allow me to elaborate. QwNkK
Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing to you to recommend a friend of mine “ Peter “ to the the vacancy of “ sports teacher “ in our school. Allow me to elaborate. I have known Peter for over 20 years. We used to live in the same neighbourhood and we also went to the same high school. Actually, sports has always been his main passion, and he is always an active member in our sports club. He graduated from the faculty of education and he has been working as a certified coach in a nearby gym for the last three years. He trains every day, follows a strict work-out programme, and runs for 5 Km every morning. I believe that he is the perfect candidate for this position because he does not only have the right academic qualification to be a teacher, but he also has the passion and the experience for this job. Children need an example to follow and someone to inspire them to be fit and healthy. Thank you for your time and I hope you can consider his application for the position. Yours sincerely, Bishoy Yousef
Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing to you to recommend a friend of mine
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Peter
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sports teacher
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in our school.
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went to the same high school. Actually, sports has always been his main passion, and he is always an active member in our sports club.

He graduated from the faculty of
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education and
he has been working as a certified coach in a nearby gym for the last three years. He trains every day, follows a strict work-out
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, and runs for 5 Km every morning.

I believe that he is the perfect candidate for this position
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have the right academic qualification to be a teacher,
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has the passion and the experience for this job. Children need an example to follow and someone to inspire them to
be fit
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Thank you for your time and I hope you can consider his application for the position.

Yours
sincerely
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IELTS letter I am writing to you to recommend a friend of mine “ Peter “ to the the vacancy of “ sports teacher “ in our school. Allow me to elaborate.

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  American English
8 paragraphs
190 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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