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I am writing to you to apply for the position as a literature teacher advertised on the website“vieclam24h. com. vn” on Thursday 30th July.

I am writing to you to apply for the position as a literature teacher advertised on the website“vieclam24h. com. vn” on Thursday 30th July. B7YB5
Dear Mr. Phuong, I am writing to you to apply for the position as a literature teacher advertised on the website“vieclam24h. com. vn” on Thursday 30th July. My full name is Tran Hoang Yen. I am 29 years old. My major is literature for education. I have recently returned to Binh Thuan, my hometown from Ho Chi Minh city to be closer to my family, and I am looking for a chance to further develop my career here. Before, I used to work as a teacher at Le Loi school. There, I had the seven –year-experience in working at a private school, which could help me become flexible and adapt to work pressure. Besides teaching, I took responsibility for the activities of Literature Club and Life Skill one. Usually, I organized outdoor activities for my students so that they could study and experience at the same time. My Curriculum Vitae and application form are attached. One of my strongest point is attention to detail. In my opinion, this is necessary for being a teacher. In orther words, it is one of the keys to a teacher’s success as well as a miracle for attracting students. Also, I have good communication skills, and enjoy working with children. With above all, I hope I could match with the needs of the job. Please contact me at my email: tranhoangyen. av1618@gmail. com or my phone number: 0935. 325. 976 if you have further questions for me. I look forward to hearing from you soon, Yours faithfully, Hoang Yen
Dear Mr.
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Phuong
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I am writing to you to apply for the position as a literature
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teacher
advertised on the website“vieclam24h.
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com
.
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vn
” on Thursday 30th July.

My full name is Tran
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Hoang
Yen. I am 29 years
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old
. My major is literature for education. I have recently returned to
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Binh
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Thuan
, my hometown from
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Ho Chi Minh city
to be closer to my family, and I am looking for a chance to
further
develop my career here.

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, I
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used
to work as a
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teacher
at Le
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Loi
school. There, I had the seven –year-experience in working at a private school, which could
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help
me become flexible and adapt to work pressure.
Besides
teaching, I took responsibility for the activities of Literature Club and Life
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Skill
one.
Usually
, I organized outdoor activities for my students
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so
that they could study and experience at the same time. My Curriculum Vitae and application form
are attached
.

One of my strongest point is attention to detail. In my opinion, this is necessary for being a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teacher
. In
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orther
words, it is one of the keys to a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teacher’s
success
as well
as a miracle for attracting students.
Also
, I have
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good
communication
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skills
, and enjoy working with children.

With
above all
, I hope I could match with the needs of the job.
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Please
contact me at my email:
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tranhoangyen
.
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av1618@gmail
.
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com
or my phone number: 0935. 325. 976 if you have
further
questions for me.

I look forward to hearing from you
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soon
,

Yours
faithfully
,

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Hoang
Yen
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IELTS letter I am writing to you to apply for the position as a literature teacher advertised on the website“vieclam24h. com. vn” on Thursday 30th July.

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
254 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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