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I am writing to expect your help about my willingness to work in head office for six months as I need to be trained about newly implemented ERP system recently in this branch.

I am writing to expect your help about my willingness to work in head office for six months as I need to be trained about newly implemented ERP system recently in this branch. xmxV9
I have written to expect your help about my willingness to work in head office for six months as I need to be trained about the newly implemented ERP system recently in the branch. We have been working on legacy software for many years and we are habituated on the system. Recently a new ERP system implemented as per organizational decision. Unexpectedly, no training has been provided us on the new system. On the other hand legacy system has been stopped while the new system started. In this situation, we all employees are facing many problems to operate new ERP by self-learning. In that case I am willing to work in head office for training purpose on ERP. When I will be in head office, in absence of me, one of my colleague named Mr. Abid Hassan (EmployeeID: 20190), Assistant MIS officer, will act as team lead on behalf of me. I talked to him about the responsibility and he agreed with me. So, for the better uninterrupted operation of the branch, it will be helpful if you arrange me the working facility in head office for six months. Sincerely yours MD. Masud Iqbal
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recently in the branch.

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years and
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. Recently a
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ERP
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implemented as per organizational decision.
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been provided
us on the
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new
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.
On the other hand
legacy
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while the
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. In this situation, we all employees are facing
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In that case
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for training purpose on ERP.

When I will be in head
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, in absence of me, one of my colleague named Mr.
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Abid
Hassan (
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EmployeeID
: 20190), Assistant MIS officer, will act as team lead on behalf of me. I talked to him about the
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responsibility and
he
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with me.

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, for the better uninterrupted operation of the branch, it will be helpful if you arrange me the working facility in head
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office
for six months.

Sincerely
yours

MD.
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Masud
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Iqbal
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IELTS letter I am writing to expect your help about my willingness to work in head office for six months as I need to be trained about newly implemented ERP system recently in this branch.

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