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I am writing this letter to bring your attention to the party that will occur in the next week in my falt.

I am writing this letter to bring your attention to the party that will occur in the next week in my falt. ebmlW
Dear Neighbour I am writing this letter to bring your attention to the party that will occur in the next week in my falt. First of all, I think that you may be did not know me till now. So I would like to introduce myself to you. I am Mohamed Elshafey, I was moved to live in this building for 1 year. I want to inform you of some details about the party. My sister is engaged so we make this small party to surprise my sister to make her happy. I invite all of her friends and our family to make a fantastic event that can not expect and we are bring some cakes and fire games I would like if you can accept my invitation to participate and join our party that will add value to our party I hope that. I look forward to your response if you can join us or not. Yours sincerely Mohamed Elshafey
Dear
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Neighbour


I am writing this letter to bring your attention to the
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party
that will occur in the
next
week in my
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falt
.

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First of all
, I
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think
that you may be
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did
not know me till
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now
.
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So
I would like to introduce myself to you. I
am Mohamed
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Elshafey
, I was
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moved
to
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live
in this building for 1 year.

I want to inform you of
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some
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details
about the
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party
. My sister
is engaged
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so
we
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make
this
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small
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party
to surprise my sister to
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make
her happy. I invite all of her friends and our family to
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make
a fantastic
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event
that can not
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expect and
we are
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bring
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some
cakes and fire
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games


I would like if you can accept my invitation to participate and
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join
our
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party
that will
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add
value to our
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party
I hope that.

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I
look forward to your response if you can
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join
us or not.

Yours
sincerely


Mohamed
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Elshafey
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IELTS letter I am writing this letter to bring your attention to the party that will occur in the next week in my falt.

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160 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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