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I am going to write a letter to my teacher

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Dear my teacher I am writing to you from Berlin. As promised, I am writing to you about my present life. My family and I came here a month ago. We are staying in a guest-house in the city centre. So far the weather is fine. We did a lot of sightseeing. We have already been to German Car factory and the Archeological museum. However we have not been to the Information Technology University yet. I tried paella yesterday at an open-air restaurant. The food was delicious and the service was excellent. The only bad thing was while we were enjoying our dessert, it started raining. Fortunately it was just a shower! That's what I wanted to tell you. I am going to send a special present for you. But the name is mystery. I hope you like my present. I and my family are going to go to Uzbekistan. I hope we will meet again. Love George
Dear my teacher

I am writing to you from Berlin. As promised, I am writing to you about my present life. My family and I came here a month ago. We are staying in a guest-
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house
in the city
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centre
.
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So
far the weather is fine. We did
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a lot of
sightseeing. We have already been to German Car factory and the Archeological museum.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
However
we have not been to the Information Technology University
yet
. I tried paella yesterday at an open-air restaurant. The food was delicious and the service was excellent. The
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only
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bad
thing was while we were enjoying our dessert, it
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started
raining.
Fortunately
it was
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just
a shower! That's what I wanted to
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tell
you. I am going to
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send
a special present for you.
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But
the name is mystery. I hope you like my present. I and my family are going to go to Uzbekistan.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
hope we will
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meet
again.
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Love
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George

IELTS letter I am going to write a letter to my teacher

Letter
  American English
2 paragraphs
157 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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