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going to another city to study and you need a part time job. ask a friend who lives there to help you

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Dear Adam, I hope you're doing well, I just wanted to let you know that I'll be soon at the University of Atlanta and I'll be staying in the city where you live. First of all, I'd like to tell you about my study plan. I got my admission in Master program, I chose communication engineering since I've already a bachelor's degree in it. Plus, I'd like to have my own company which sells digital fingerprint keys. Getting a part time vacancy while studying is going to be extremely helpful for me because I need to pay for my own living cost such as the rent. Another reason is that I have debt that must be paid back in the next month which means I have no choice whether to have a job. I would be grateful if you can provide me with some details about jobs requirement there. One more thing, I'll send you my resume tomorrow; please start applying for GT companies till my arrival. I'm looking forward to seeing you. Take care, Rami
Dear Adam,

I hope you're doing well, I
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wanted to
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let
you know that I'll be
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soon
at the University of Atlanta and I'll be staying in the city where you
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live
.

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First of all
, I'd like to
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tell
you about my study plan. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
my admission in Master program, I chose communication engineering since I've already a bachelor's degree in it. Plus, I'd like to have my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
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company
which sells digital fingerprint keys.

Getting a
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part time
vacancy while studying is going to be
extremely
helpful for me
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because
I need to pay for my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
living cost such as the rent. Another reason is that I have debt that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be paid
back in the
next
month which means I have no choice whether to have a job.

I would be grateful if you can provide me with
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
about jobs requirement there. One more thing, I'll
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
you my resume tomorrow;
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please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
applying for GT
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companies
till my arrival.

I'm looking forward to seeing you.

Take care,

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Rami
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IELTS letter going to another city to study and you need a part time job. ask a friend who lives there to help you

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  American English
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175 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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