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Getting job or admission in college

Getting job or admission in college PMPEg
Dear Kate, I received the letter about you selection in one of the prestigious institution in the country. I am very happy on side but also worried about another for the confusion you are having with joining that college. I want to ask you, what are the reasons why you want to go to college? Instead, better to look for a job. As I am well aware of your family financial conditions. Joining the college will automatically come up with the loan and will also take years to repay. It will only increase financial stress over you harming your concentration in academics. It’s quite fruitful for you to apply for the job before you will get into debt. After getting the job it will help you to repay your daily expenses and also put down the load from your family. In other words, it will make you financially independent. Also, your hard work and overtime will support you to get the life you always expected. According to your skills like quick problem-solving strategies, high analytical analysis, good communication skills, and fast environment adaptability. I think having business analyst will be a great option for you or you can also apply for sales and marketing having good communication is a prior requirement of the job.
Dear Kate,

I received the letter about
you selection
in one of the prestigious institution in the country. I am
very
happy on side
but
also
worried about another for the confusion you are having with joining that college.

I
want to ask you, what are the reasons why you want to go to college?
Instead
, better to look for a
job
.
As
I am well aware of your family financial conditions. Joining the college will
automatically
come
up with the loan and will
also
take years to repay. It will
only
increase financial
stress
over you harming your concentration in academics. It’s quite fruitful for you to apply for the
job
before
you will
get
into debt.

After getting the
job
it will
help
you to repay your daily expenses and
also
put down the load from your family.
In other words
, it will
make
you
financially
independent.
Also
, your
hard
work and overtime will support you to
get
the life you always
expected
.

According to your
skills
like quick problem-solving strategies, high analytical analysis,
good
communication
skills
, and
fast
environment adaptability. I
think
having business analyst will be a great option for you or you can
also
apply for sales and marketing having
good
communication is a prior requirement of the
job
.
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IELTS letter Getting job or admission in college

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
214 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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