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General Writing Task 1 You rent an apartment and you are quite happy with it but you want to suggest a renovation. Write a letter about your suggestion. In your letter, you should tell: • Your appreciation of the current condition • What is the renovation and why? • What is the benefits of your suggestion?

General Writing Task 1 You rent an apartment and you are quite happy with it but you want to suggest a renovation. Write a letter about your suggestion. In your letter, you should tell: • Your appreciation of the current condition • What is the renovation and why? • What is the benefits of your suggestion? gDE1d
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter about some renovation suggestion which i think the apartment required where i live now. I rent an apartment from you. Overall, I am satisfied with the conditions and facilities which you provided in it. There are some renovation work is need in the room. The balcony windows give the specticular view of the the playground which is infront of my room. But the windows is too old and its lock stuck sometime. I tried to fix it by my self but still stuck as occacionally. Moreover, I will be happy if you change dressing table mirror. The mirror is good in condition but fashion outdated. I also get some comments about the dressing table one of my friend. He suggested me if I want to change that on he will help me. Because I think all the furniture are quite new and this is the only thing which is outdated. I believe that if you make these small changes renovation then it would be the perfect place for live. I hope you consider my suggestion and send some workers for small renovation. your faithfully, Avtar Singh
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter about
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some
renovation suggestion which
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
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think
the apartment required where
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i
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live
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now
.

I rent an apartment from you.
Overall
, I
am satisfied
with the conditions and facilities which you provided in it. There are
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some
renovation work
is need
in the room. The balcony windows give the
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specticular
view of
Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only "the" or "the" is left.
the the
playground which is
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infront
of my room.
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But
the windows is too
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old
and its lock stuck sometime. I tried to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fix
it by my self
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
still
stuck as
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occacionally
.
Moreover
, I will be happy if you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
dressing table mirror. The mirror is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
in condition
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but
fashion outdated. I
also
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get
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some
comments about the dressing table one of my friend. He suggested me if I want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
that on he will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
all the furniture are quite new and this is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
thing which
is outdated
. I believe that if you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
these
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small
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
renovation then it would be the perfect place for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
.

I hope you consider my suggestion and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
workers for
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small
renovation.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
your
faithfully
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Avtar
Singh

IELTS letter General Writing Task 1 You rent an apartment and you are quite happy with it but you want to suggest a renovation. Write a letter about your suggestion. In your letter, you should tell: • Your appreciation of the current condition • What is the renovation and why? • What is the benefits of your suggestion?

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
192 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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