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General Letter to your friend

General Letter to your friend KW1KL
Dear Paul, Hi, how are you? I am writing to let you know that I have got a job and have started teaching computer science at Lotus School near my house. Hopefully I will be at peace here because I am happy with my work culture. It’s a new school, much closer to my apartment because of which I am able to save time. I even bought a cycle to ride to school, just like my students. I have to report to work every day from Monday to Saturday from 6am to 1pm. Although I have to get up early, I still get to rest in the evenings. My career also seems on the right track. I am also in charge of call log register at my school. My pay is 15$ per hour which is quite decent. So, tell me how’s your life? Are you going to California to meet Som. Miss good old school days. Cheers, Jay.
Dear Paul,

Hi, how are you? I am writing to
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you know that I have
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got
a job and have
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started
teaching computer science at Lotus
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School
near my
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.
Hopefully
I will be at peace here
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because
I am happy with my work culture.

It’s a new
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school
, much closer to my apartment
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because
of which I am able to save time. I even
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bought
a cycle to ride to
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school
,
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just
like my students. I
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have to
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report to work
every day from Monday to Saturday from 6am to 1pm. Although I
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have to
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get
up early, I
still
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get
to rest in the evenings. My career
also
seems on the right
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track
. I am
also
in charge of call log register at my
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school
. My pay is
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15$
per hour which is quite decent.

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So
,
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tell
me how’s your life? Are you going to California to
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meet
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Som
. Miss
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good
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old
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school
days.

Cheers,

Jay.

IELTS letter General Letter to your friend

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
159 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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