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You and your family moved to a new city and you want to write a letter to your friend

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Dear Anna, How are you? Sorry, I haven't been in touch. I was overwhelmed with exams. Moreover, my parents decided to move to a new city which is better than my previous place. To be honest, it was an interesting experience for me and my family. We have transferred from Ha Long to Ha Noi. It's the capital of Vietnam. This city is more crowded than my old one but it has numerous opportunities to have a good job. Furthermore, Ha Noi has a plethora of parks so in free time, I often go jogging with my sisters. I also meet my neighbors and make new friends. They're very kind and generous. All I want is that I can introduce them to you. Anyway, I was very scared due to the fact that we must move to a new house in the different city. But now thing has changed. I feel over the moon now. Everything is so stunning. And I've planted some flowers and can't wait to show you. Please arrange some time and visit me next month. We will have good time together. Looking forward to seeing you soon. All the best, Vera
Dear Anna,

How are you? Sorry, I haven't been in touch. I
was overwhelmed
with exams.
Moreover
, my parents decided to
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move
to a new city which is better than my previous place.

To be honest, it was an interesting experience for me and my family. We have transferred from Ha Long to Ha
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Noi
. It's the capital of Vietnam. This city is more crowded than my
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old
one
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numerous opportunities to have a
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good
job.
Furthermore
, Ha
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Noi
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has
a plethora of parks
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in free time, I
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go jogging with my sisters. I
also
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meet
my neighbors and
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make
new friends. They're
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very
kind and generous. All I want is that I can introduce them to you.

Anyway, I was
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very
scared due to the fact that we
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must
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move
to a new
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house
in the
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different
city.
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But
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now
thing
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has
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changed
. I feel over the moon
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now
. Everything is
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so
stunning. And I've planted
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some
flowers and can't wait to
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show
you.

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Please
arrange
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time and visit me
next
month. We will have
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good
time together.

Looking forward to seeing you
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soon
.

All the best, Vera

IELTS letter You and your family moved to a new city and you want to write a letter to your friend

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
194 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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