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Dear Mrs Etherington, I am writing in response to the job advertisement to work in families in England / Scotland / USA / / Canada. My name Anna, I am 20 years old. I have 5 months of babysitting experience, and I consider myself to be an energetic, sociable, caring, and articulate communicator. On top of that, I enjoy working with children. In addition, I am also a hard worker, good at housework. I am happy to hear that I will be provided with accommodation, food and pocket money. Because I am an explorer, I would love to know more about your country's culture and learn many new languages. I look forward to becoming a member of your family in the near future. Best regards
Dear Mrs
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Etherington
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I am writing in response to the job advertisement to work in families in England / Scotland / USA / / Canada.

My name Anna, I am 20 years
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. I have 5 months of babysitting experience, and I consider myself to be an energetic, sociable, caring, and articulate communicator.
On top of that
, I enjoy working with children.

In addition
, I am
also
a
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hard
worker,
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good
at housework. I am happy to hear that I will
be provided
with accommodation, food and pocket money.
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Because
I am an explorer, I would
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love
to know more about your country's culture and learn
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many
new languages.

I look forward to becoming a member of your family in the near future.

Best regards
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IELTS letter fomal letter of application

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
124 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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