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Dear Mr. Singh, I am writing this letter to congratulate you on the remarkable performance of your concert which was held in Chandigarh on the 20th of January, 2020. This was your first concert in the city and I was eagerly waiting to attend it. It was the full house I could see people waiting in the queue to get in, the vibes, music, , and songs you sang were amazing and it was totally worth waiting for it. Unfortunately, I didn't get the chance to meet you; I am also learning music and has performed a number of times in my university events and at other places. I would be really grateful if you could help me to provide an opportunity to be a part of your group at your next concert, it will be a great learning experience for me to work with a superstar like you. Hoping for a prompt and positive reply. Yours sincerely Aman
Dear Mr. Singh,

I am writing this letter to congratulate you on the remarkable performance of your concert which
was held
in Chandigarh on the 20th of
When specifying a month and year, the comma is unnecessary: "January 2020".
January, 2020
.

This was your
first
concert in the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
city and
I was
eagerly
waiting to attend it. It was the full
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house
I could
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see
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people
waiting in the queue to
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get
in, the vibes, music,
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,
and songs you sang were amazing and it was
totally
worth waiting for it.

Unfortunately, I didn't
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get
the chance to
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meet
you; I am
also
learning music and has performed a number of times in my university
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events
and at other places. I would be
really
grateful if you could
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help
me to provide an opportunity to be a part of your group at your
next
concert, it will be a great learning experience for me to work with a superstar like you.

Hoping for a prompt and
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positive
reply.

Yours
sincerely


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Aman

IELTS letter feedback of concert of the singer you attended

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
158 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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