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Education is the key factor for the development of a country. To what extend do you agree to this

Education is the key factor for the development of a country. To what extend do you agree to this oxxMX
The world is racing forward with advancement in modern science and technology. Education is a key part of this development and also assists in the invention of new technological aspects. Some people believes that education is the most essential factor in the progression of a country. This statement has it's own merits and through this essay, I will discuss the possible reasons that support and oppose this view and the benefits they bring to our society. On one hand, having a good educational system will bring abundant possibilities for academicians. It will provide necessary theoretical as well as practical knowledge for a particular subject. A country will only advance if it constitutes young and innovative minds. For instance, India's former president, A. P. J Abdul Kalam sir was a visionary as well as a scientist. He has contributed towards the social, scientific and political fields of India and is considered as a legend. He achieved all these with a good foundation of knowledge and vision. Furthermore, he believed that India will only develop with a properly functioning system of schools, colleges and universities. In other words, education is an important factor which plays a determining role in the development of community both economically and scientifically. On the other hand, fields such as farming and business are also important for the advancement of a region. In India, farming is considered the backbone of the society. It constitutes more than fifty percentage of the gross economy. Moreover, a country with a good agricultural sector will be more healthy and prosperous. For example, in the outskirts of my town, there is 10 acre land in which people harvest crops and this supplies enough rice for large amount of people in the town. Most of the individuals working in this cultivation area is uneducated. To conclude, education can have many prospects and values. It offers enhancement and development for a country. However, farming occupations and other unskilled works also have to be encouraged and supported as it also improves a community in a certain manner.
The world is racing forward with advancement in modern science and technology.
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Education
is a key part of this development and
also
assists in the invention of new technological aspects.
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Some
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people
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believes
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education
is the most essential factor in the progression of a
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country
. This statement has
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it's
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merits and through this essay, I will discuss the possible reasons that support and oppose this view and the benefits they bring to our society.

On one hand, having a
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good
educational system will bring abundant possibilities for academicians. It will provide necessary theoretical
as well
as practical knowledge for a particular subject. A
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country
will
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only
advance if it constitutes young and innovative minds.
For instance
, India's former president, A. P. J Abdul
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Kalam
sir was a visionary
as well
as a scientist. He has contributed towards the social, scientific and political fields of India and
is considered
as a legend. He achieved all these with a
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good
foundation of knowledge and vision.
Furthermore
, he believed that India will
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only
develop with a
properly
functioning system of schools, colleges and universities.
In other words
,
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education
is an
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important
factor which plays a determining role in the development of community both
economically
and
scientifically
.

On the other hand
, fields such as farming and business are
also
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important
for the advancement of a region. In India, farming
is considered
the backbone of the society. It constitutes more than fifty percentage of the gross economy.
Moreover
, a
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country
with a
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good
agricultural sector will be more healthy and prosperous.
For example
, in the outskirts of my town, there is 10 acre land in which
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people
harvest crops and this supplies
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enough
rice for large amount of
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people
in the town. Most of the individuals working in this cultivation area
is uneducated
.

To conclude
,
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education
can have
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many
prospects and values. It offers enhancement and development for a
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country
.
However
, farming occupations and other unskilled works
also
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have to
be encouraged
and supported as it
also
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improves
a community in a certain manner.
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IELTS letter Education is the key factor for the development of a country. To what extend do you agree to this

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