Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter, emind him when and where you met tell him what kind of job you are interested in say why you think you would be suitable for the job

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter, emind him when and where you met tell him what kind of job you are interested in say why you think you would be suitable for the job n6dKg
Dear Mr. John, My name is Astha Goel and I am writing this letter in reference to our meeting in the flight to Toronto last month. You offered me a job position of head chef in one of your New York branch. We met last month in the flight from New York to Toronto. I was sitting next to you and we discussed about your restaurant business. I hope you remember me. We also discussed regarding a job opening in your one of the restaurant. Currently, I am working with hasta-la-vista restaurant in Brampton as a head chef. I am planning to move to New York next month, therefore, looking for a job opportunity with similar position. I have an experience of 5 years as sous chef and almost 2 years of experience as head chef. In addition, I have managed many events with more than 500 pax dining in. Overall, I have an extensive experience of taking care of the kitchen of a 5 star restaurant. Would you mind considering my profile for that vacancy. It would be great if you can confirm the same at your earliest. Hope to hear from you soon. Yours sincerely, Astha Goel
Dear Mr. John,

My name is
Possible spelling mistake found.
Astha
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
Goel and
I am writing this letter in reference to our meeting in the flight to Toronto
‘last month’ indicates a finished event of the past. Please check the predicate's tense.
last month
. You offered me a job position of head chef in one of your New York branch.

We met last month in the flight from New York to Toronto. I was sitting
next
to you and we
Did you mean simply "discussed your"? You do not need the word "about" here.
discussed about your
restaurant business. I hope you remember me. We
also
discussed regarding a job opening in your one of the restaurant.

Currently
, I am working with
Possible spelling mistake found.
hasta-la-vista
restaurant in Brampton as a head chef. I am planning to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
to New York
next
month,
therefore
, looking for a job opportunity with similar position.

I have an experience of 5 years as sous chef and almost 2 years of experience as head chef.
In addition
, I have managed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
with more than 500 pax dining in.
Overall
, I have an extensive experience of taking care of the kitchen of a
'5 star' is missing a hyphen.
5 star
restaurant.

Would you mind considering my profile for that vacancy. It would be great if you can confirm the same at your earliest. Hope to hear from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
sincerely
,
Possible spelling mistake found.
Astha
Possible spelling mistake found.
Goel

IELTS letter During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter, emind him when and where you met tell him what kind of job you are interested in say why you think you would be suitable for the job

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
198 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter, emind him when and where you met tell him what kind of job you are interested in say why you think you would be suitable for the job