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during a recent plane journey, you sat next to a business man who owns a chain restaurant. you talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one his restaurants

during a recent plane journey, you sat next to a business man who owns a chain restaurant. you talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one his restaurants lED1
Dear Sir, I am writing to you this letter in regards of our last meeting in the flight destinated to toronto with turkish airlines last week. I was very pleased to meet you and I have been thinking lately of being a member of your chain restaurants team. In fact, we had a deep talk in the flight about food, restaurants and quality service and my previous experience in that field, and you have suggested to me to send you my resume, because of that I decided to write you to express my interest about the job. I have been working for a french restaurant for five years as a team manager and I have participated in the yearly increase of the revenue, due to that, I have decided to experience a new challenge in an another restaurant, I would like to apply for a team chain manager, because I think that this is the exactly job that fits my communication and culinar skills. The figures have showed that I can perfectly manage a team under high pressure and lead them to better achievements. Kindly accept my request. Iam waiting for your prompt feedback. Yours faithfully.
Dear Sir,

I am writing to you this letter
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
in regards of
our last meeting in the flight
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destinated
to
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toronto
with
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turkish airlines
‘last week’ indicates a finished event of the past. Please check the predicate's tense.
last week
. I was
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very
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pleased
to
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meet
you and I have been thinking lately of being a member of your chain
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restaurants
team.

In fact, we had a deep talk in the flight about food,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurants
and quality service and my previous experience in that field, and you have suggested to me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
you my resume,
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because
of that I decided to write you to express my interest about the job.

I have been working for a
"French" needs to be capitalized when not used as a verb.
french
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restaurant
for five years as a team manager and I have participated in the yearly increase of the revenue, due to that, I have decided to experience a new challenge in an another
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
restaurant
, I would like to apply for a team chain manager,
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because
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that this is the exactly job that fits my communication and
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culinar
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.

The figures have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
that I can
perfectly
manage a team under high pressure and lead them to better achievements.

Kindly accept my request.

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Iam
waiting for your prompt feedback.

Yours
faithfully
.
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IELTS letter during a recent plane journey, you sat next to a business man who owns a chain restaurant. you talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one his restaurants

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
196 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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