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a housing for a controlled physical environment in which people can live under surrounding inhospitable conditions (as under the sea)

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Dear Mr King, Hope you are doing great as the last time, when we saw each other in the plane. I thought to write you a letter considering the discussion about possible hiring process for your restaurant. To begin with, being more specific about our last catch up, we met in a flight to Toronto which departed from Mumbai. Moreover, if I remember corretly, you were returning from your first trip to India in the last week of past December. Secondly, I am interested in working as a chef in one of your indian restaurants as you mentioned that you are planning to open a new indian restaurant in Berlington area. I assume, by this time you are already looking for staff for the business. Furthermore, I would say that I can be a perfect person as a chef since I have 12 years of useful experience in one of the renowned cuisine located in Mumbai city. In addition to that, I have completed 2 years of cookery course from the university of Mumbai, where I had a chance to learn from exceptionally talented chef Aamir Patel. A quick google search will help you to know about this famous and skilled personality. I would like to thank you for considering me for this position and I am looking forward to hear from yo real soon. Yours sincerely, Viraj Gohil
Dear Mr King,

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with, being more specific about our last catch up, we met in a flight to Toronto which departed from Mumbai.
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, you were returning from your
first
trip to India in the last week of past December.

Secondly
, I
am interested
in working as a chef in one of your
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indian
restaurants as you mentioned that you are planning to open a new
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restaurant in
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Berlington
area. I assume, by this time you are already looking for staff for the business.

Furthermore
, I would say that I can be a perfect person as a chef since I have 12 years of useful experience in one of the renowned cuisine located in Mumbai city.
In addition
to that, I have completed 2 years of cookery course from the university of Mumbai, where I had a chance to learn from
exceptionally
talented chef
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Aamir
Patel. A quick google search will
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famous
and skilled personality.

I would like to thank you for considering me for this
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yo
real
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Yours
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Viraj
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Gohil
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IELTS letter a housing for a controlled physical environment in which people can live under surrounding inhospitable conditions (as under the sea)

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
228 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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