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Dear Sir, My Name is Krishna Kumar and I am writing this letter with regards to building of a shopping centre near my home.

Dear Sir, My Name is Krishna Kumar and I am writing this letter with regards to building of a shopping centre near my home. My Community association informed me that a Shopping complex is planned to be built near my home. As it is a residential area, it will be an impediment to many family residing in our area. Hence, We all feel that the council should take necessary action to stop the builder from proceeding with the opulent shopping complex. As we are confident that shopping complexes should not be developed inside a residential area. If this rule is not followed, we are planning to escalate the issue to higher authorities of our council. If the shopping complex is built in this residential area, then it may deteriorate the traffic and the area may get congested. Kindly share us more information about number of shops, area of building and permits obtained from the local council. I appreciate your attention to this matter and look forward to hear from you. Kind regards, Krishna Kumar Gopal
Dear Sir,

My Name is Krishna
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
Kumar and
I am writing this letter
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
with regards to
building of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
near my home. My Community association informed me that a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Shopping
complex
is planned
to
be built
near my home.

As it is a residential
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
, it will be an impediment to
Possible agreement error. The noun family seems to be countable; consider using: "many families".
many family
residing in our area.

Hence
, We all feel that the council should take necessary action to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
the builder from proceeding with the opulent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
complex.

“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
we are confident that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
complexes should not
be developed
inside a residential
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
. If this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rule
is not followed, we are planning to escalate the issue to higher authorities of our council.

If the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
complex
is built
in this residential
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
, then it may deteriorate the traffic and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
congested. Kindly share us more information about number of shops,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
of building and permits obtained from the local council.

I appreciate your attention to this matter and look forward
In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to hearing".
to hear
from you.

Kind regards,

Krishna Kumar
Possible spelling mistake found.
Gopal

IELTS letter Dear Sir, My Name is Krishna Kumar and I am writing this letter with regards to building of a shopping centre near my home.

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
174 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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