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You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match.

Dear Abeera I am extremely sorry to hear about your accident. I hope you have recovered from your injury and are feeling better now. We had a great start in the football match on Friday and till the last 15 minutes, we were leading by 2-0. However, to our surprise, the other team managed to score two goals, which resulted in a draw, probably, because you were not there to defend. To top that, the weather conditions were not favorable either for us. The ground was wet and muddy, therefore, it was getting very difficult for us to execute our movements and strategies. Towards the end, we were extremely exhausted to defend our goal due to the constant sliding on the ground. Even though, it was a hell of a match, but I felt your presence would have made a difference to the match and we would not have let the other team score. Please let me know when can me and the guys come to meet you. Wishing you a speedy recovery and hoping to hear from you soon. Cheers, Kaleem
Dear
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Abeera


I am
extremely
sorry to hear about your accident. I hope you have recovered from your injury and are feeling better
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now
.

We had a great
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start
in the football match on Friday and till the last 15 minutes, we were leading by 2-0.
However
, to our surprise, the other team managed to score two goals, which resulted in a draw,
probably
,
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because
you were not there to defend.

To top that, the weather conditions were not favorable either for us. The ground was wet and muddy,
therefore
, it was getting
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very
difficult for us to execute our movements and strategies. Towards the
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end
, we were
extremely
exhausted to defend our goal due to the constant sliding on the ground.

Even though
, it was a hell of a match,
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but
I felt your presence would have made a difference to the
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match and
we would not have
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let
the other team score.

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Please
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let
me know when can me and the guys
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come
to
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meet
you.

Wishing you a speedy recovery and hoping to hear from you
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soon
.

Cheers,

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Kaleem
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IELTS letter You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match.

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