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Dear Sir/Madam, Today i am writing this letter to you with very unhappy events. First I would like to start with the following I have rented a car from your company last week, AS i were driving on the road a deer full of sudden and hit the car by the right side and broke the glass shield. Most of the car glasses is broken, IT was an awful day really, I were not able to drive it after this accident took place I had to call a friend to come and help me out, IT was the first experience of this kind that ever happened to me, As i Remember it was a sunny day and the sun distracted me, So i could not see the deer, I hope to see a response from you regarding my letter. I am fully capable of paying the Costs of fixing of the car, Thank you for hearing me out, Looking forward to hearing from you soon, Best wishes, Beshoy sabry,

Dear Sir/Madam, Today i am writing this letter to you with very unhappy events. First I would like to start with the following I have rented a car from your company last week, AS i were driving on the road a deer full of sudden and hit the car by the right side and broke the glass shield. Most of the car glasses is broken, IT was an awful day really, I were not able to drive it after this accident took place I had to call a friend to come and help me out, IT was the first experience of this kind that ever happened to me, As i Remember it was a sunny day and the sun distracted me, So i could not see the deer, I hope to see a response from you regarding my letter. I am fully capable of paying the Costs of fixing of the car, Thank you for hearing me out, Looking forward to hearing from you soon, Best wishes, Beshoy sabry, VbR6
Dear Sir/Madam, Today i am writing this letter to you with very unhappy events. First I would like to start with the following I have rented a car from your company last week, AS i were driving on the road a deer full of sudden and hit the car by the right side and broke the glass shield. Most of the car glasses is broken, IT was an awful day really, I were not able to drive it after this accident took place I had to call a friend to come and help me out, IT was the first experience of this kind that ever happened to me, As i Remember it was a sunny day and the sun distracted me, So i could not see the deer, I hope to see a response from you regarding my letter. I am fully capable of paying the Costs of fixing of the car, Thank you for hearing me out, Looking forward to hearing from you soon, Best wishes, Beshoy sabry,
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IELTS letter Dear Sir/Madam, Today i am writing this letter to you with very unhappy events. First I would like to start with the following I have rented a car from your company last week, AS i were driving on the road a deer full of sudden and hit the car by the right side and broke the glass shield. Most of the car glasses is broken, IT was an awful day really, I were not able to drive it after this accident took place I had to call a friend to come and help me out, IT was the first experience of this kind that ever happened to me, As i Remember it was a sunny day and the sun distracted me, So i could not see the deer, I hope to see a response from you regarding my letter. I am fully capable of paying the Costs of fixing of the car, Thank you for hearing me out, Looking forward to hearing from you soon, Best wishes, Beshoy sabry,

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  American English
8 paragraphs
169 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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