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Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to explain to you the conditions in the room that is allocated to me and to request you for accommodation change.

Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to explain to you the conditions in the room that is allocated to me and to request you for accommodation change. RYjP
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to explain to you the conditions in the room that is allocated to me and to request you for accommodation change. To get to the point directly, I share a room with one of the senior students, who will be graduating this year. Since her curriculum does not involve much studying, she is always hosting a party in our room. As I am a freshman, I have a lot to study and do an additional amount of work as a teaching assistant, but I am unable to concentrate on any of the work because of the huge noise and the big gathering. As a result, I have fallen behind on many of the assignments to be submitted. I would kindly request you to shift me to any vacant room that is Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to explain to you the conditions in the room that is allocated to me and to request you for accommodation change. To get to the point directly, I share a room with one of the senior students, who will be graduating this year. Since her curriculum does not involve much studying, she is always hosting a party in our room. As I am a freshman, I have a lot to study and do an additional amount of work as a teaching assistant, but I am unable to concentrate on any of the work because of the huge noise and the big gathering. As a result, I have fallen behind on many of the assignments to be submitted. I would kindly request you to shift me to any vacant room that is available. I prefer a non-sharing accommodation on campus. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Prasanna. I prefer a non-sharing accommodation on campus. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Prasanna
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
to you the conditions in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
that
is allocated
to me and to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
request
you for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
accommodation
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
to the point
directly
, I share a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
with one of the senior students, who will be graduating this year. Since her curriculum does not involve much studying, she is always hosting a party in our room.

As I am a freshman, I have a lot to study and do an additional amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
as a teaching assistant,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I am unable to concentrate on any of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the huge noise and the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
gathering.
As a result
, I have fallen behind on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
of the assignments to
be submitted
.

I would kindly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
request
you to shift me to any vacant
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
that is
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
to you the conditions in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
that
is allocated
to me and to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
request
you for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
accommodation
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
to the point
directly
, I share a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
with one of the senior students, who will be graduating this year. Since her curriculum does not involve much studying, she is always hosting a party in our room.

As I am a freshman, I have a lot to study and do an additional amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
as a teaching assistant,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I am unable to concentrate on any of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the huge noise and the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
gathering.
As a result
, I have fallen behind on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
of the assignments to
be submitted
.

I would kindly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
request
you to shift me to any vacant
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
that is
available. I prefer a non-sharing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
accommodation
on campus.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
Sincerely
,

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Prasanna
. I prefer a non-sharing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
accommodation
on campus.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
Sincerely
,

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Prasanna
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IELTS letter Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to explain to you the conditions in the room that is allocated to me and to request you for accommodation change.

Letter
  American English
15 paragraphs
310 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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