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your friend who lives in a another country has invited you to come and stay with him/her on your next holiday.You are too busy to accept the invitation. Write a letter to friend. In your letter, Thank him.her for invitation,Explain why cant you come and Ask him avout other times to visit

your friend who lives in a another country has invited you to come and stay with him/her on your next holiday. You are too busy to accept the invitation. Write a letter to friend. In your letter, Thank him. her for invitation, Explain why cant you come and Ask him avout other times to visit qEer
Hello Jessie, Hope you are doing well! It has been a long time since we last wrote. I would like to thank you for the invitation to visit you. Sorry, but I will not be able to make it due to my hectic work schedule. I have recently started a new job and have been bogged down with a lot of work. With multiple deadlines around the corner, I have been working day in day out. I don’t mean to complain; I have been enjoying it immensely. It’s a really great opportunity to work alongside people whom you have admired all your life. Could you let me know of another time when I can visit you? I would really love to meet your family and explore London. I will be free around Christmas as my company would be under a holiday freeze. I would definitely like to escape the scorching heat for some snowfall! Take care and stay safe. Best Wishes. Avneet
Hello Jessie,

Hope you are doing well! It has been a long time since we last wrote. I would like to thank you for the invitation to visit you. Sorry,
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but
I will not be able to
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make
it due to my hectic work schedule.

I have recently
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started
a new job and have
been bogged
down with
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a lot of
work. With multiple deadlines around the corner, I have been working day in day out. I don’t mean to complain; I have been enjoying it
immensely
. It’s a
really
great opportunity to work alongside
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people
whom you have admired all your life.

Could you
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let
me know of another time when I can visit you? I would
really
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love
to
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meet
your family and explore London. I will be free around Christmas as my
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company
would be under a holiday freeze.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would definitely like to escape the scorching heat for
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some
snowfall!

Take care and stay safe.

Best Wishes.

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Avneet

IELTS letter your friend who lives in a another country has invited you to come and stay with him/her on your next holiday. You are too busy to accept the invitation. Write a letter to friend. In your letter, Thank him. her for invitation, Explain why cant you come and Ask him avout other times to visit

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  American English
7 paragraphs
161 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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