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Dear Mr. Adams, As the manager of our department, you previously requested me to send the annual report concerning my work performance. During the last year, I managed to complete two projects, which had a very beneficial effect on the development of my skills. The project I was working on for the first two quarters of the previous year is GreenSky, a Canadian company that hired us for their website redesign. The other project was internal, and my main responsibility was to create a web application for employees of our organization. Although my customers estimate my performance as extremely good, some improvements may take place. First of all, being a designer means spending a lot of time communicating with stakeholders, so my English language skills require enhancements. The other thing I would like to improve is my soft skills, especially, public speaking and presentation of my work to others. After careful investigation on how to make those improvements, I found out that our c

Dear Mr. Adams, As the manager of our department, you previously requested me to send the annual report concerning my work performance. During the last year, I managed to complete two projects, which had a very beneficial effect on the development of my skills. The project I was working on for the first two quarters of the previous year is GreenSky, a Canadian company that hired us for their website redesign. The other project was internal, and my main responsibility was to create a web application for employees of our organization. Although my customers estimate my performance as extremely good, some improvements may take place. First of all, being a designer means spending a lot of time communicating with stakeholders, so my English language skills require enhancements. The other thing I would like to improve is my soft skills, especially, public speaking and presentation of my work to others. After careful investigation on how to make those improvements, I found out that our c Naly
Dear Mr. Adams, As the manager of our department, you previously requested me to send the annual report concerning my work performance. During the last year, I managed to complete two projects, which had a very beneficial effect on the development of my skills. The project I was working on for the first two quarters of the previous year is GreenSky, a Canadian company that hired us for their website redesign. The other project was internal, and my main responsibility was to create a web application for employees of our organization. Although my customers estimate my performance as extremely good, some improvements may take place. First of all, being a designer means spending a lot of time communicating with stakeholders, so my English language skills require enhancements. The other thing I would like to improve is my soft skills, especially, public speaking and presentation of my work to others. After careful investigation on how to make those improvements, I found out that our company provides us with an opportunity to visit various professional courses. I found two courses that could helpful for me: Business English for B2-students and Presentation excellence. To visit them I need your recommendation as my manager. I look forward to your response. Yours sincerely, Nadezhda Voropai
Dear Mr. Adams,

As the manager of our department, you previously requested me to
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send
the annual report concerning my work performance.

During the last year, I managed to complete two projects, which had a
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very
beneficial effect on the development of my
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skills
. The project I was working on for the
first
two quarters of the previous year is
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GreenSky
, a Canadian
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company
that hired us for their website redesign. The other project was internal, and my main responsibility was to create a web application for employees of our organization.

Although my customers estimate my performance as
extremely
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good
,
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some
improvements may take place.
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First of all
, being a designer means spending
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a lot of
time communicating with stakeholders,
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so
my English language
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skills
require enhancements. The other thing I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
is my soft
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
,
especially
, public speaking and presentation of my work to others.

After careful investigation on how to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
those improvements, I found out that our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
provides us with an opportunity to visit various professional courses. I found two courses that could helpful for me: Business English for B2-students and Presentation excellence. To visit them I need your recommendation as my manager.

I look forward to your response.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Nadezhda
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Voropai
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IELTS letter Dear Mr. Adams, As the manager of our department, you previously requested me to send the annual report concerning my work performance. During the last year, I managed to complete two projects, which had a very beneficial effect on the development of my skills. The project I was working on for the first two quarters of the previous year is GreenSky, a Canadian company that hired us for their website redesign. The other project was internal, and my main responsibility was to create a web application for employees of our organization. Although my customers estimate my performance as extremely good, some improvements may take place. First of all, being a designer means spending a lot of time communicating with stakeholders, so my English language skills require enhancements. The other thing I would like to improve is my soft skills, especially, public speaking and presentation of my work to others. After careful investigation on how to make those improvements, I found out that our c

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