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Dear Manager, I am writing this letter to tell you about merits and demerit of using app to make transactions on goods and services. First of all let me start to explain the benefits of using the app for payment most expecially in my country. Firstly It reduces the strength, weakness, threat of the workers on the job. Secondly it makes the buying and selling goods and services to be more easier. Thirdly it enhances mass production because it reduces a lot of time you will spend in bank to transact. On the other hand it have many demerits as well such as defrauding, difficulty in buy data.

Dear Manager, I am writing this letter to tell you about merits and demerit of using app to make transactions on goods and services. First of all let me start to explain the benefits of using the app for payment most expecially in my country. Firstly It reduces the strength, weakness, threat of the workers on the job. Secondly it makes the buying and selling goods and services to be more easier. Thirdly it enhances mass production because it reduces a lot of time you will spend in bank to transact. On the other hand it have many demerits as well such as defrauding, difficulty in buy data. VBOrm
Dear Manager, I am writing this letter to tell you about merits and demerit of using app to make transactions on goods and services. First of all let me start to explain the benefits of using the app for payment most expecially in my country. Firstly It reduces the strength, weakness, threat of the workers on the job. Secondly it makes the buying and selling goods and services to be more easier. Thirdly it enhances mass production because it reduces a lot of time you will spend in bank to transact. On the other hand it have many demerits as well such as defrauding, difficulty in buy data.
Dear Manager,

I am writing this letter to
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tell
you about merits and demerit of using app to
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make
transactions on
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goods
and services.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
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let
me
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start
to
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explain
the benefits of using the app for payment most
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expecially
in my country.
Firstly
It
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reduces
the strength, weakness, threat of the workers on the job.

Secondly
it
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makes
the buying and selling
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goods
and services to be
Use only "easier" (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
more easier
.

Thirdly
it enhances mass production
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because
it
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reduces
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a lot of
time you will spend in bank to transact.

On the other hand
it
Did you mean "has"?
have
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many
demerits
as well
such as defrauding, difficulty in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
data.

IELTS letter Dear Manager, I am writing this letter to tell you about merits and demerit of using app to make transactions on goods and services. First of all let me start to explain the benefits of using the app for payment most expecially in my country. Firstly It reduces the strength, weakness, threat of the workers on the job. Secondly it makes the buying and selling goods and services to be more easier. Thirdly it enhances mass production because it reduces a lot of time you will spend in bank to transact. On the other hand it have many demerits as well such as defrauding, difficulty in buy data.

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  American English
6 paragraphs
108 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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