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Complain about phone which bought in the shop

Complain about phone which bought in the shop pa3k9

Dear Miss Komolova, I am writing to complain about your phone which I bought it from your shop located at 15. Shohrux street. First of all, when I took the phone from your shopassistant, it worked well. However, when I came home the item does not work well. I have read all the informations in its book's. Nevertheless, I have read the whole book, I cannot work it. Furthermore, the phone's some functions does not open and show at all. These tools are very necessary and important for me. So, I cannot do anything in this phone. In addition the phone's a type of wind instrument has very low voice. With low sound vote, I cannot hear anything and contact with other people. Last but not least the phone's camera does not take a photo clearly. As a result, I cannot take a photo anything and anywhere. I would be grateful to receive a cheque for the outstanding s without further delay. I hope you will consider the points. I have received very carefully. Yours faithfully, Kurokova Makhsuda

Dear Miss Possible spelling mistake found.MoldovaHomology
Komolova
,

I am writing to complain about your phone which I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchased
bought
 it from your shop located at 15. Possible spelling mistake found.ShortChorusShoreShoresShortsShotgun
Shohrux
 street.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, when I took the phone from your Possible spelling mistake found.shop assistant
shopassistant
, it worked well. However
, when I came home the item does not work well. I have read all the The word 'informations' is a legal term. In standard English, the word 'information' is a non-count noun. Did you mean "information"?information
informations
 in its book's. Nevertheless
, I have read the whole book, I cannot work it. Furthermore
, the phone's This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 functions does not open and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
show
 at all. These tools are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 necessary and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 for me. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
, I cannot do anything in this phone. In Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?addition,
addition
 the phone's a type of wind instrument has This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 low voice. With low sound vote, I cannot hear anything and contact with other This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
. Last This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 not least the phone's camera does not take a photo clearly
. As a result
, I cannot take a photo anything and anywhere.

I would be grateful to receive a Possible spelling mistake. 'cheque' is British English.check
cheque
 for the outstanding s without further
 delay.

I hope you will consider the points. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 have received This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
carefully
.

Yours faithfully
, Possible spelling mistake found.Kurosawa
Kurokova
Possible spelling mistake found.Masada
Makhsuda