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Asking for an advice about how to work with noisy pupils at school

Asking for an advice about how to work with noisy pupils at school Apo1w
Dear Sir, I am writing to ask if you could give me your some advice about how to work with some pupils who always make noise during the lesson. They already go out the control and don't let me teach something in class. They don't disturb only me but also other teachers often complain about them. The windows of school are often broken down by them. I had organized meeting three times with their parents but they were futile. I know you are very busy person. I would be greatful if you could give me your some advice to solve these problems. I look forward your letter or I am always ready to discuss my questions on phone any time convenient to you. My phone numer is written end of the letter. Your faithfullyMiss Susan Svon.
Dear Sir, I am writing to ask if you could give me your
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advice about how to work with
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pupils who always
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noise during the lesson. They already go out the control and don't
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me teach something in
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. They don't disturb
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other teachers
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complain about them. The windows of school are
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broken down by them. I had organized meeting three times with their parents
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they were futile. I know you are
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busy person.
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would be
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greatful
if you could give me your
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some
advice to solve these problems.
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I
look forward your
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letter or
I am always ready to discuss my questions on phone any time convenient to you. My phone
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numer
is written
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of the letter. Your
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faithfullyMiss
Susan
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IELTS letter Asking for an advice about how to work with noisy pupils at school

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  American English
1 paragraphs
136 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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