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application for financial aid

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Hi! I applied for financial aid because I graduated this year and am working a part time job for a very low salary. Also, I live in Turkey and the currency has lost value in our country. Because of the corona, I'm getting half of the 203. 83 dollars he wrote now. Yes, I work for fifteen days. I am unemployed for fifteen days. Coursera's courses are very good and I want to take myself to the next level in my career by taking advantage of them. I am currently managing the social media of a hotel. but I do not have the financial means to improve myself. The fee you want me to pay for this course coincides with a high price in my country with the exchange rate difference. That's why I'm asking for financial support from you in this course. I am an ordinary person who earns less than the minimum wage in Turkey. I really want to learn korean and get a government scholarship for master's degree in korea. I don't have the opportunity to do it any other way. I would be very grateful if you could help me with this. With love. . .
Hi! I applied for financial aid
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low salary.
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of the corona, I'm getting half of the 203. 83 dollars he wrote
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now
. Yes, I work for fifteen days. I
am unemployed
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Coursera's courses are
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and I want to take myself to the
next
level in my career by taking advantage of them. I am
currently
managing the social media of a hotel.
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but
I do not have the financial means to
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improve
myself. The fee you want me to pay for this course coincides with a high price in my country with the exchange rate difference.

That's why I'm asking for financial support from you in this course. I am an ordinary person who earns less than the minimum wage in Turkey. I
really
want to learn
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korean
and
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korea
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IELTS letter application for financial aid

Letter
  American English
3 paragraphs
200 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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