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An organisation has given an advertisement for part-time volunteer job for local children. Write a letter to the advertiser of an organisation

An organisation has given an advertisement for part-time volunteer job for local children. Write a letter to the advertiser of an organisation Jqqxk
Dear sir, . I am writing this letters to inform you that I have read the advertisement for part-time volunteer job for local children which was given in newspaper on 3/09/2021. This is Rupinder kaur. I have been living in the Diamond Avenue, Amritsar. I have done BSC nursing. Now I have been doing job in nayyar hospital, Amritsar. I consider, I am suitable for this job, by virtue of, I came to know that you are running a free camp for those people who are below poverty line, they don't have money to treat their disease. As, I also work in this field. Hence, I have got knowledge about the diseases and treatments. On the top of it, your camp is near to my home. I would like to join volunteer job on 12/09/2021, for the reason that, now I am out of station. I am at my maternal house for attending my brother wedding. I will come back my home at 11/09/2021. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Rupinder kaur
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I am writing this letters to inform you that I have read the advertisement for part-time volunteer
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job
for local children which was
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given
in newspaper on 3/09/2021. This is
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Rupinder
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kaur
. I have been living in the Diamond Avenue, Amritsar. I have done BSC nursing.
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Now
I have been doing
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job
in
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nayyar
hospital, Amritsar. I consider, I am suitable for this
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job
, by virtue of, I came to know that you are running a free camp for those
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people
who are below poverty line, they don't have money to treat their disease.
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, I
also
work in this field.
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, I have
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got
knowledge about the diseases and treatments. On the top of it, your camp is near to my home. I would like to
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join
volunteer
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job
on 12/09/2021, for the reason that,
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now
I am out of station. I am at my maternal
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house
for attending my brother wedding.
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I
will
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come
back my home at 11/09/2021.
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I
am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours
faithfully
,

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IELTS letter An organisation has given an advertisement for part-time volunteer job for local children. Write a letter to the advertiser of an organisation

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  American English
2 paragraphs
175 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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