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An Australian company offers money to foreign students to study in Australia.Write a letter to the company. Introduce yourself Say what do you want to study How the money will help you

An Australian company offers money to foreign students to study in Australia. Write a letter to the company. Introduce yourself Say what do you want to study How the money will help you pLBMa
Dear Sir, I am Jenny Jackson and I belong to India. Furthermore, I heard about the scholarship which are provided by your organization to pupils of another country to take the education in Australia. In addition, I completed computer engineering last year in India and I want to pursue masters in the same field from the university of Sydney. Also, I passed engineering with good percentage as well as I was the topper in my class. But my financial condition is not good and the fee for the graduate course is high. Moreover, this money will reduce the burden of my parents' shoulders who are anxious about my education cost. Additionally, I will be able to pay more attention on my studies as I will not have to find any part time job. But, when will I get the scholorship? If you have any query, please contact me at anytime. My contact number is 9999824510. I await a favourable response. Yours faithfully, Jenny Jackson
Dear Sir,

I am Jenny Jackson and I belong to India.
Furthermore
, I heard about the scholarship which
are provided
by your organization to pupils of another country to take the education in Australia.

In addition
, I completed computer engineering last year in India and I want to pursue masters in the same field from the university of Sydney.
Also
, I passed engineering with
good
percentage
as well
as I was the topper in my
class
.
But
my financial condition is not
good
and the fee for the graduate course is high.

Moreover
, this money will
reduce
the burden of my parents' shoulders who are anxious about my education cost.
Additionally
, I will be able to pay more attention on my studies as I will not
have to
find any
part time
job.
But
, when will I
get
the
scholorship
?

If you have any query,
please
contact me at anytime. My contact number is 9999824510. I await a
favourable
response.

Yours
faithfully
,

Jenny Jackson
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IELTS letter An Australian company offers money to foreign students to study in Australia. Write a letter to the company. Introduce yourself Say what do you want to study How the money will help you

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
163 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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