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Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the college enrolment officer. In your letter explain why you are writing describe your circumstances ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enrol in the course

Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the college enrolment officer. In your letter explain why you are writing describe your circumstances ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enrol in the course g5bLl
Dear Mr. Stark, My name is Jane Smith and I am writing because the new computing course you are promoting about Advance Digital Design is of interest to me. It has come to my attention that only experimented individuals are eligible to enroll, and that is a relevant aspect I wanted to discuss. I have never had formal education because I was Homeschooled, nonetheless, I have acquired a lot of practice in the software area autonomously in the last 8 years, especially with Photoshop which is my favorite development tool for editing. If you were so kind to consider me as a participant, I am willing to go through the testing of my skills. I am sure I can exceed your expectations. My timetable is very flexible, therefore I could stop by your office at any time of your convenience. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Jane Smith (Mrs. )
Dear Mr. Stark,

My name is Jane
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Smith and
I am writing
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because
the new computing course you are promoting about Advance Digital Design is of interest to me.

It has
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come
to my attention that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
experimented individuals are eligible to enroll, and
that is
a relevant aspect I wanted to discuss. I have never had formal education
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because
I
was Homeschooled
, nonetheless, I have acquired
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
practice in the software area
autonomously
in the last 8 years,
especially
with Photoshop which is my favorite development tool for editing.

If you were
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
kind to consider me as a participant, I am willing to go through the testing of my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
. I am sure I can exceed your expectations. My timetable is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
flexible,
therefore
I could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
by your office at any time of your convenience.

Looking forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Jane Smith (Mrs.
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)

IELTS letter Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the college enrolment officer. In your letter explain why you are writing describe your circumstances ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enrol in the course

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7 paragraphs
152 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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