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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the college enrolment officer. In your letter explain why you are writing describe your circumstances ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enrol in the course

Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the college enrolment officer. In your letter explain why you are writing describe your circumstances ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enrol in the course 5nJB
Dear Sir/Maam, I am writing to you as I came across your T1-Computer course program and was very intrigued by it. I have always been particularly inclined to the world of computers since a young age but never had the opportunity to pursue a full-time study in the field due to personal life matters. Hence, I have been working in the management field since 2013. I took up learning about computers from a few online courses and have a few projects completed in python programming language and now have the ability to understand the concepts. Even though the course calls for students with a former elementary course completed, I believe enrolling in your T1-program would help me brush up on all the knowledge I have gained. I was hoping if you could make a special exception for me after considering my previous work in computers. I promise to excel and work twice as hard to prove my ability in this course. Yours Sincerely, Kate
Dear Sir/
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I am writing to you as I came across your T1-Computer
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course
program and was
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very
intrigued by it.

I have always been
particularly
inclined to the world of computers since a young age
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but
never had the opportunity to pursue a full-time study in the field due to personal life matters.
Hence
, I have been working in the management field since 2013. I took up learning about computers from a few online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
and have a few projects completed in python programming language and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
have the ability to understand the concepts.

Even though
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
calls for students with a former elementary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
completed, I believe enrolling in your T1-program would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me brush up on all the knowledge I have gained. I was hoping if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a special exception for me after considering my previous work in computers. I promise to excel and work twice as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
to prove my ability in this course.

Yours
Sincerely
,

Kate

IELTS letter Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the college enrolment officer. In your letter explain why you are writing describe your circumstances ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enrol in the course

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