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Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the college enrolment officer. In your letter explain why you are writing describe your circumstances ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enrol in the course

Dear sir My name is a sim and I am working as an area manager in the food industry and I saw your advertisement for the new course in the newspaper. I am interested in the course. Although, I never studied middle level computer course due to my work demand I learned myself most of the computer basics from the help of youtube. futhermore, i completed my graduation in 2018 and due to my hard work i am working in Multinational company but for the further growth i have to complete computer course as per the requirement of the position i want to apply. although, i am always interested in the computer. i already know the computer basic for example Microsoft word, excel, powerpoint but if you want, you can arrange a test and on the basis of test results you can give your decision for my admission. if you want to give me a chance for the studying then you can reply me the details for the course and test if you want to arrange. i am looking forward for your positive response. your sincerely sim
Dear sir

My name is a
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sim and
I am working as an area manager in the food industry and I
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saw
your advertisement for the new
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course
in the newspaper. I
am interested
in the course.

Although, I never studied middle level computer
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course
due to my work demand I learned myself most of the computer basics from the
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help
of
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youtube
.
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futhermore
,
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i
completed my graduation in 2018 and due to my
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hard
work
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i
am working in Multinational
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company
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but
for the
further
growth
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i
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have to
complete computer
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course
as per the requirement of the position
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i
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want
to apply.
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although
,
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i
am always interested in the computer.

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i
already know the computer basic
for example
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Microsoft word
, excel,
Did you mean “PowerPoint” (= Microsoft presentation software)?
powerpoint
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but
if you
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want
, you can arrange a
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test
and on the basis of
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test
results you can give your decision for my admission.

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if
you
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want
to give me a chance for the studying then you can reply me the
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details
for the
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course
and
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test
if you
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want
to arrange.

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i
am looking forward for your
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positive
response.

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your
sincerely


sim

IELTS letter Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the college enrolment officer. In your letter explain why you are writing describe your circumstances ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enrol in the course

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
186 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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