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After being involved in an accident, you were looked after by a person you did not know before. Write a special thank you letter to express your gratitude. v.3

After being involved in an accident, you were looked after by a person you did not know before. Write a special thank you letter to express your gratitude. v. 3
You were so kind and Godsend to look after me after I was involved in an accident last Monday. I am writing to express my immeasurable admiration for your altruistic and brave action. I am Simon Annand, a math teacher at the Cherry Blossom high school, and I live with my family at 24 Abbey Rise Street, London. On my way to the school at around 8. 30 am last Monday, my motorbike crashed with a private car near Aberdeen Drive and I lost control. I was severely injured and could not move or pick up my bike. If you had not decided to help me, the situation could have been worse. I am so grateful to you for your kind help and generous words. You even took the burden to take me to a nearby hospital and that was so noble of you. I cannot express enough how thankful I am to you. When my parents and wife heard about how courageously you assisted me, they prayed for you even though they have never met you before. I regret that I could not thank you enough. Please accept my invitation to visit our home at your convenience and allow my family to thank you properly. I have recovered quickly and the thanks go to you. Please visit us with your family and let our brief encounter becomes an opportunity to know you more. Yours truly, Simon
You were
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so
kind and Godsend to look after me after I
was involved
in an accident last Monday. I am writing to express my immeasurable admiration for your altruistic and brave action.

I am Simon
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Annand
, a math teacher at the Cherry Blossom high school, and I
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live
with my family at 24 Abbey Rise Street, London. On my way to the school at around 8. 30 am last Monday, my motorbike crashed with a private car near Aberdeen Drive and I lost control. I was
severely
injured and could not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
or pick up my bike. If you had not decided to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me, the situation could have been worse.

I am
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so
grateful to you for your kind
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help
and generous words. You even took the burden to take me to a nearby hospital and that was
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so
noble of you. I cannot express
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
how thankful I am to you. When my parents and wife heard about how
courageously
you assisted me, they prayed for you
even though
they have never met you
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before
.

I regret that I could not thank you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
.
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Please
accept my invitation to visit our home at your convenience and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
my family to thank you
properly
. I have recovered
quickly
and the thanks go to you.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
visit us with your family and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
our brief encounter becomes an opportunity to know you more.

Yours
truly
,

Simon
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter After being involved in an accident, you were looked after by a person you did not know before. Write a special thank you letter to express your gratitude. v. 3

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
236 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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