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Advertisement for caregiver in an Australian magazine

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter in response to an advertisement, published in one of the Australian magazines, where you asked for a short time caregiver to look after your six -years old child. I have good experience to take the best care of your child and I am hastened to apply for this job. I am confident that i would be able to give best service to take care of your child since i have had a great experience raising a younger brothers as i was the eldest child in the family. Besides i love kids since i consider them bundle of joy that's why i even took care of some young childs in my hometown as babysitter and since i love the childrens, i have done short term babysitter course also to relate with kids in better way. i recently came to visit Australia from my home country at the invitation of my brother and will live with him for the next six months. And, while i am in australia, i also would love to explore this beautiful country and learn about the lifestyle and culture of its people.

Dear Sir/Madam,

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 to apply for this job.

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love
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 to relate with kids in better way.

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 recently came to visit Australia from my home country at the invitation of my brother and will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
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love
 to explore this This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :gorgeousstunning
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