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A sports club in your area about to be closed and you oppose to that . Write a letter to the manager and make suggestions why it is important that the club stays open.

A sports club in your area about to be closed and you oppose to that. Write a letter to the manager and make suggestions why it is important that the club stays open. 2YwJ
Dear sir, My name is kulwinder kaur and I am a life time member at your sports club. I heard from someone that the club is going to close. I am writing this letter to tell you it is not a very wise decision. This club has been here in this locality since 2002 and it has become the integral part of this society. It become a place to socialize and to do exercise. Without this club it will be really difficult for the people of this area to get some exercise. I heard that a supermarket will be replacing the club. As you know there is already one supermarket in this area and by bringing another one, this locality will be cramped by the traffic coming to supermarket. So I urge you to pay close attention to my letter and please reconsider your plan to close the sports club. Hoping for your consideration! Yours faithfully, Kulwinder
Dear sir, My name is
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kulwinder
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
kaur and
I am a
Did you mean "lifetime"?
life time
member at your sports
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
club
. I heard from someone that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
club
is
There isn't usually a preposition before "close". Did you mean "going close"?
going to close
. I am writing this letter to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you it is not a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
wise decision. This
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
club
has been here in this locality since 2002 and it has become the integral part of this society. It
Did you mean "becomes"?
become
a place to socialize and to do exercise. Without this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
club
it will be
really
difficult for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
of this area to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
exercise. I heard that a supermarket will be replacing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
club
. As you know there is already one supermarket in this area and by bringing another one, this locality will
be cramped
by the traffic coming to supermarket.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
I urge you to pay close attention to my letter and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
reconsider your plan to close the sports
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
club
. Hoping for your consideration! Yours
faithfully
,
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
Kulwinder

IELTS letter A sports club in your area about to be closed and you oppose to that. Write a letter to the manager and make suggestions why it is important that the club stays open.

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  American English
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156 words
5.0
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