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a sport center in your neighborhood would be closed. write a letter to the manager.

a sport center in your neighborhood would be closed. write a letter to the manager. gYj97
Dear Manager, I am Tom Smith, a neighbor of the sports center. I read on the newspaper that the sports center will be closed recently. I am writing to express my thoughts and hope the center can remain open for the community. The sports center has serviced our community for a decade. We have lots of sweet memory there, and it has a special meaning for our family because my daughter learnt to play basketball in the center, and now she has became a famous player in the state. Moreover, we love gathering in the sports center with our neighbors to stay healthy and connected. If the center is closed, I have no idea where we could hang out and do exercise regularly. I hope you could consider this situation again and help us keep the center. I would like to provide some suggestions for you to solve the problem. I know that the sports center is facing the financial issue of maintenance and staff. I think we should apply for a financial support from the government. Besides, the sports center could recruit volunteers from the community to reduce the expense of employment. I believe our kind-hearted neighbors are willing to offer helps to the center. Thank you for your time. I appreciate it if you can help us remain the sports center. I look forward to hearing from you. Sincerely, Tom Smith
Dear Manager,

I am Tom Smith, a neighbor of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
center. I read on the newspaper that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
center will
be closed
recently.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am writing to express my thoughts and hope the center can remain open for the community.

The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
center has serviced our community for a decade. We have lots of sweet memory there, and it has a special meaning for our family
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because
my daughter
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learnt
to play basketball in the center, and
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now
she has
Use past participle here: "become".
became
a
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famous
player in the state.
Moreover
, we
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love
gathering in the
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sports
center with our neighbors to stay healthy and connected. If the center
is closed
, I have no
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
where we could hang out and do exercise
regularly
. I hope you could consider this situation again and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
us
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the center.

I would like to provide
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
suggestions for you to solve the problem.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
know that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
center is facing the financial issue of maintenance and staff.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
we should apply for a financial support from the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
.
Besides
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
center could recruit volunteers from the community to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the expense of employment. I believe our kind-hearted neighbors are willing to offer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to the center.

Thank you for your time. I appreciate it if you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
us remain the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
center. I look forward to hearing from you.

Sincerely
,

Tom Smith
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IELTS letter a sport center in your neighborhood would be closed. write a letter to the manager.

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
232 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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